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Pichu Bros. The Wild West

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Pichu Bros. The Wild West

Post by Mercury on Wed Dec 17, 2008 9:19 am

Review, please.

Pichu Bros. The Wild West


Prologue

"SHERIFF!!!! We're under attack!" A blob of yellow zoomed through the building, knocking doors down in the process.
"Huh, what do you mean, Captain?" An orange mouse peered around the corner, to get a look at the running Pichu.
"Its Wak Black sir!"
Sheriff Raichu was gone before Captain Pichu said 'sir!'

"Wak Black, we meet again. How very nice of you to come." A bulky Marowak was fighting a Pichu with one hand, easily holding him off.
"General! Stand aside!"
"Yes....sir...." The tired Pichu stopped attacking and crawled away.
"Wak. I will end this now. You shall be gone from this world, banished to the depths of the deep gloomy sea,"
"Yes sir!" Wak imitated the General, even giving the salute. He did not expecting the Earthquake to arrive as quickly as it did.

So, is it any good?
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Re: Pichu Bros. The Wild West

Post by Administrator on Wed Dec 17, 2008 5:16 pm

i like it, cant wait till theres more
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Re: Pichu Bros. The Wild West

Post by Mercury on Sat Nov 21, 2009 5:55 pm

I'm terribly sorry for the extraordinarily long wait. Time to update!

Wak pulled himself up off the floor, grinding his teeth loudly. The two Pokémon stared at eachother, neither backing down. Suddenly, Wak charged, with a burst of speed so great it could have toppled a flat of 20 storeys. The Sheriff jumped out of the way just in time, slamming into the ground hard with another Earthquake. This time, Wak was ready. Wak jumped onto a nearby building, grabbing his Bonemerang.

The two Pichus watched from afar, as the two mighty Pokémon fought. They winced as Wak Black threw Raichu to the floor and proceeded to club him with his famous Bonemerang. The two charged, only to be sent flying back by a Thunderbolt. Raichu grabbed Wak's legs, then slammed his head onto the dusty floor. He dropped Wak and backed off, waiting for Wak to stand up.

Wak used this to his advantage. He reached his hand slowly towards his Bonemerang. Then, in one swift movement, grabbed it and threw it hard towards the Sheriff. Raichu ducked, and laughed.
"You'll have to do better than that Wak." As he finished the final word, he was smashed on the back of the head, and was sent smashing into the floor.

The Pichus' eyes widened. There was no way an electric type could survive a Bonemerang. They watched as Wak spat on their Sheriff, and watched on as he disappeared into the distance.
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Re: Pichu Bros. The Wild West

Post by seaa-swix on Sat Nov 21, 2009 11:23 pm

wow... thats really good... i cant wait for more!!!


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Re: Pichu Bros. The Wild West

Post by Mercury on Sun Nov 22, 2009 1:03 am

Thanks. I should have some more to post later.
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Re: Pichu Bros. The Wild West

Post by Mercury on Sun Nov 22, 2009 10:27 am

I can't be bothered to post chapters, just make it in different segments. Anywayz:

"That's all boys, thank you for your time."
The captain and general pushed open the door and walked towards the exit of the police station, hoping to get away as quickly as possible. The captain was about to open the door when a postal pidgey flew into him.
"Are the Cpt. & Gnrl Pichu and Pichu?"
"That's us." The two replied, staring at the little bird.
"Read the letter. Nurse Chansey said to get to the hospital as soon as possible."
It wasn't really a letter, it was just a note scribbled in a very neat hand, probably by Chansey. The two glanced at eachother, then zoomed through the town, dodging Pokémon and lamposts alike.

They burst through the hospital doors, and charged up the stairs. They'd brought their Sheriff in, they knew exactly where he was. The turned a corner sharply, and nearly crashed into an old Machoke, who was mumbling something about 'kids these days'. They slowed to a hault a few metres on. Above the door was the emergency sign.

"General.... before I die, I want to give you this....." The Sheriff nodded towards his hat and his badge.
"And captain.... take... take....the Bonemerang......"
The two Pichus faces fell. Game over for Sheriff Raichu. Tumbleweed Town now belonged to the Pichu Bros.

The newly appointed Sheriff pick up the hat and badge, and placed them upon his person. His brother picked up the Bonemerang Raichu had confiscated from Wak Black back when the Pichus weren't even alive.

After thinking a while, the two decided to call it the Pichurang. They called it this after they both cried so hard they shocked eachother, including the Bonemerang. It had turned a bright yellow.

Days later, the pair were at a loss. They didn't know what to do. They walked about the now deserted Tumbleweed Town, watching real Tumbleweeds roll along. Then the Sheriff had an idea. Grabbing hold of his brother, he ran into the path of a tumbleweed. The tumbleweed was approaching quickly. They nodded their heads to eachother, and charged towards it. As soon as they'd started, they suddenly began to roll around and around, laughing their heads off.

Hope you enjoyed it, more will come later.
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Post by seaa-swix on Mon Nov 23, 2009 9:21 pm

COOL!!!


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Re: Pichu Bros. The Wild West

Post by Bibarel on Wed Nov 25, 2009 7:31 pm

Thats pretty hot Very Happy


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